This excerpt comes from a fantasy novel that I offered feedback on. I performed a detailed content edit (or line edit) on this section focused on improving clarity, readability, and word choice while maintaining the author’s voice. I prompted ideas for the writer through questions and my own suggestions for removing redundancy and improving descriptions. You’ll notice that this type of editing is less focused on small grammar or punctuation errors as some sections may be rewritten after edits.
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